I see what you were going for
A+ for trying to put the sounds together, but they mean nothing to each other and make you sound like you're listening to two really different sounds. I like the ambient side, but mixing it with really industrial sound effects just makes it sound like high-pitched dentist drilling at a rave show. Either put the ambience with softer sound effects or vice versa. THe first six fifteen seconds or so were good. THat sounded like it had a little bit of harmony.